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Sometimes we grow up like this:
gyroscopic, like sunflowers, our faces turning
towards the sun.  And the sun is more than a ball
of burning gas.  The sun is warm and bright
and alive.  And we are warm and bright and alive.

I am no bloom.  Wings do not rely
on the kindness of strangers.  But sometimes they will tell you
that people aren’t things you can own.
They will tend to the flowers, they will lean into the garden,
prune dead leaves and reshape
innocent bushes.  Their sweat will drip into
your faces, my glittering lilies, my lonely and cynical roses,
and they will tell you how to
come into your own.  They will say the world is a
cold and frightening place when you are
far from your home soil.  They will pack your roots with compost
and entice you to stay.

Rise from the dirt and move on.
©2009 ~citywings
:iconcitywings:

Author's Comments

something.

Daily Deviation

Given 2009-06-28

"One wants to join the elements of nature and rise up just like the poem tells you too. A rare poem of optimism," states the suggester of Far Away by =citywings. (Suggested by =vgaer and Featured by ^fllnthblnk)

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:iconposhlost:
I think the last line/stanza sort of broke it. It may have tried to be overly optimistic. However you have great imagery as always, and everything before that really worked.

Thanks for writing
J

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"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris.
Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."
- Catullus
:iconyouinventedme:
the open & close are tremendous.

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an antique arms and armor expert
:iconb1gfan:
You are rising and rising to be the light of your next day Lynabee :D The priests are singing their devotionals...surely you here them?
:iconcitywings:
I DO INDEED
CHOCOLATE RAIN FOR EVERYONE
UNLIKE ZEUS, I DO NOT MAKE PEOPLE PREGNANT WITH WEATHER, SO THAT'S ONE THING YOU DON'T HAVE TO WORRY ABOUT

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ZOMBIES ON THE EVENT HORIZON, M'LORD

Death is coming and we've been making charts, wasting time. I am a batshit genius scientist prophet goddess and I guess this message is to let you know I won't be in tomorrow. (Joey Comeau)
:iconcitywings:
thank you very much. i'm always really impressed [by myself] when you like things i write. :heart:

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ZOMBIES ON THE EVENT HORIZON, M'LORD

Death is coming and we've been making charts, wasting time. I am a batshit genius scientist prophet goddess and I guess this message is to let you know I won't be in tomorrow. (Joey Comeau)
:iconcitywings:
i sort of share that opinion about the last line-i think it came out almost too self-help-y, or something. but i also think it fits, so i'm leaving it there.

thank you very much for the critique, as always. :heart:

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ZOMBIES ON THE EVENT HORIZON, M'LORD

Death is coming and we've been making charts, wasting time. I am a batshit genius scientist prophet goddess and I guess this message is to let you know I won't be in tomorrow. (Joey Comeau)
:iconvgaer:
I would like to point out that the gaping hole in my gut is really thankful that you wrote this. And I'll probably look at it, over, and over, and over again.

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join #ALLourLOVE a gay, straight, and anywhere in between alliance
:iconejectionletter:
you have a green thumb in this poem - to stretch the metaphor to it's limit.
(:
:iconcitywings:
thank you.
:heart:

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ZOMBIES ON THE EVENT HORIZON, M'LORD

Death is coming and we've been making charts, wasting time. I am a batshit genius scientist prophet goddess and I guess this message is to let you know I won't be in tomorrow. (Joey Comeau)
:iconcitywings:
i am glad that i helped you, dearest. :heart:

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ZOMBIES ON THE EVENT HORIZON, M'LORD

Death is coming and we've been making charts, wasting time. I am a batshit genius scientist prophet goddess and I guess this message is to let you know I won't be in tomorrow. (Joey Comeau)

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